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She Goes Down

March 18, 2011
By Mayzzzz GOLD, HOBBS, New Mexico
Mayzzzz GOLD, HOBBS, New Mexico
14 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
I say "you know you love me" all the time. My mom said it and my aunt said it all the time. To me it means that i know the ones close to me love me and I dont always have to be told that they love me when i already know. I love my family..


Screams and yells
a flash goes off and...
Smack she does down
Punched, hit, slapped,
No!No! No! No! Stop
I don't want to fight
Bam Bam hit hit
Down left hit one two
Right hit one two three
Screams and yells
No!No! Stop



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Mayzzzz GOLD said...
on Aug. 20 2011 at 11:17 am
Mayzzzz GOLD, HOBBS, New Mexico
14 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
I say "you know you love me" all the time. My mom said it and my aunt said it all the time. To me it means that i know the ones close to me love me and I dont always have to be told that they love me when i already know. I love my family..

thanks and yes i will read your work and let you know what i think

on Aug. 10 2011 at 9:20 am
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
24 articles 0 photos 382 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

Your language tells so much in its simplicity! The flow of your poem is very nice.

Would you mind reading some of my work, rating, and commenting? Especially my poems, I don't really write poetry, so I need feedback about them.