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Shiver, Shiver MAG

September 22, 2009
By Bassoonkelley GOLD, Tampa, Florida
Bassoonkelley GOLD, Tampa, Florida
15 articles 0 photos 49 comments

So, imagine you're in a car.

(Yes, I know this is silly, but just do it for me.)

You're in a car, and you're sitting next to someone who absolutely puts the color into your world, you know? Someone who just knocks the socks right-the-hell off of your feet. And I mean, you've got some serious emotions that are just clawing their way up your esophagus, fighting so so hard against the back of your teeth.
They just want to see the light of day … not to mention the flecks of orange in that other person's eyes that you're always thinking about.

(Huh? Oh yeah, so anyways)

The other person is o-freaking-blivious to everything you're feeling. I mean, it feels like every capillary in your circulatory system is twisting and knotting around the muscles they surround. Your heart is just absolutely screaming, but they're too busy babbling away about grindcore or some **** to even so much as wonder what it is you're feeling.

But you're like a pro at this. I mean you've known this person for a while now, at least a few years, so you've mastered the civil war going on between your internal organs, and you've explained to them who's the frickin' boss.
(Yes, smarta**, the boss would be you in this scenario.)
(Jesus, can I go on? Are you okay with that?)

So, where was I? Yeah, okay, so, you're a pro at controlling this insane crush you've got going on, but then – they touch you. They touch your ever-loving skin. We have skin-to-skin contact. And I mean, roots just burst from the bottom of your heart and the tips of those roots lock tight around your toes.
It feels like each and every one of your skin cells is shaking with excitement.
It's that good.

Well … I mean, you're like …
Well, you're the other person.

The author's comments:
The sections in parentheses are usually in italics - it gives the illusion that the narrator is speaking to someone else.

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on Feb. 5 2012 at 9:08 pm
wayfollower SILVER, Colorado Springs, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"I can do all things through Christ who strengthens me."
- The Holy Bible
"Gravitation cannot be held responsible for people falling in love."
-Albert Einstein

Oh my gosh I am at such a loss for words. Your work is right up there or even better than some big authors. You are an inspiration to me. I have read I think all of your TeenInk writing, and I can't say there are any I disliked. I am a huge fan, please keep it up!

LaceeJade GOLD said...
on Sep. 19 2011 at 8:15 pm
LaceeJade GOLD, Bucyrus, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
♥ I've made mistakes in my life. i've let people take advantage of me, and i accepted way less than i deserve. But, i've learned from my bad choices, and even though there are some things i can never get back and people who will never be sorry. i'll know better next time and i wont settle for anything less than i deserve. ♥

I know Exactly How You Feel! It Is So Frustrating How Oblivious They Are About It!!! Its like they have no idea whats going on inside you! They have no idea you are holding on to every word they say. They have no idea how much they mean to you! Its Irritating How They Cant Take A Hint No Matter How Obvious It Is!

StarWorks said...
on Jun. 15 2011 at 11:30 am
StarWorks, A, Other
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I never had that feeling before (maybe some day I will xxx), but this is AWESOME! I love your work.

on May. 30 2011 at 7:30 pm
M_IML DIAMOND, Ganei Tikva, Other
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amazing as usual...i read some of your other things; your talent is unmistakeable. i love this!!

i also know exactly the feeling, but i've never been able to put it into words this well...

to sum my overall impression of your writing up?

um, WOW!

on Jul. 6 2010 at 5:02 pm
possiblylindsey GOLD, Keller, Texas
12 articles 12 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
"see? if i liked chris drew, id end up like randy. 5 foot 1 and vegetarian. vegetarians arent men." -camden
"what are you grinnin' at?" - mr. martinez
"you just cant recreate stupid." - jacob

ohmygoodness! i freaking love this![= and i completely know the feeling.

a.m.f BRONZE said...
on Jun. 16 2010 at 6:48 pm
a.m.f BRONZE, Gainesville, Florida
3 articles 12 photos 97 comments

Favorite Quote:
"God never shuts a door unless he opens another."

Great imagry and detail.  It's amazing.

on Jun. 14 2010 at 8:05 pm
jessharmony24 BRONZE, Stamford, Connecticut
2 articles 0 photos 2 comments
wow! thats great! your a really good writer i read some of your other stuff too. and this totally reminded me of being with a certain person like you can feel the emotion and connect to it! its great!

on Mar. 15 2010 at 10:45 pm
Bassoonkelley GOLD, Tampa, Florida
15 articles 0 photos 49 comments
Thank you :) Your support means so much! <3

on Mar. 15 2010 at 8:17 pm
Anime_Rocker_549 BRONZE, Lebanon, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Some people are like slinkies, they are pretty much useless but can't help but laugh when they tumble down the stairs.

Wonderful! I read this in the Magizine and fell in love with it. I can hear your voice when reading this i love basicly everything abut this poem :D keep it up

on Feb. 2 2010 at 8:33 pm
live~en~livre BRONZE, Maplewood, New Jersey
2 articles 1 photo 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It does not do to dwell on dreams and forget to live." --Albus Dumbledore.
* I can't seem to follow this quote at all, but I still love it.

You. Are. Amazing. I've read some of your other things and the're all Amazing. You are definitely have to most unique writing of anyone on this site that I've read so far! (That's sa very good thing even if it doesn't sound like it.) Keep Writing PLEASE!

on Feb. 2 2010 at 3:05 pm
bamboom212 PLATINUM, Chestnut Ridge, New York
23 articles 0 photos 155 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The truth with a bad intent, is worse than any lie you can ever invent."
"You are smarter than you think. You are stronger than you look. You are braver than you feel."

wow. this is really good. its so kewl how u put such meaningful thoughts in the right format, ya know? You're extremely talented. plz read & comment some of my work! it would mean alot.

on Dec. 20 2009 at 9:53 am
DiscardedHarmony DIAMOND, Woodinville, Washington
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Oh. My. Goodness. Seriously, this was amazing! God damn girl, how do you do it? This almost made me cry; I know exactly the feeling, and this was lovely.

on Oct. 18 2009 at 5:54 pm
Bassoonkelley GOLD, Tampa, Florida
15 articles 0 photos 49 comments
haha, I'm not too sure that I have a secret. This just runs through my head, and I write it down; I guess it's my thought process. Sometimes I go back into the piece and put the abstract ideas (love, peace, honesty, etc.) into concrete ideas. For instance, the most hard-hitting part of this one would be the roots in my opinion, because the roots are personifying love. :) <3

TigerLynn GOLD said...
on Oct. 15 2009 at 8:36 pm
TigerLynn GOLD, Maysville, Kentucky
10 articles 0 photos 110 comments

Favorite Quote:
"She walks in beauty,
Like the night of cloudless climes and starry skies;
And all that's best of dark and bright
Meet in her aspect and her eyes."

How do you even begin to constuct your masterpieces? Seriously, they are unbelievably awesome. What's your secret?