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Double Suicide

June 28, 2009
By JustAnotherShadow503 SILVER, Dallas, Georgia
JustAnotherShadow503 SILVER, Dallas, Georgia
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No one ever saw what I tried so hard to hide

The pain and nothingness, so deep inside

I never expected that someone would break the shield

The façade I worked so hard to build

You saw through my false reactions and extended a hand

You told me you’d been through the same, things only we’d understand

I showed you my scars, inside and out

I told you my past no one knew about

You gave me a shoulder to cry on, helped me conquer my fears

And we were there for each other through the years

But even though we were there for each other, life was still hard

We couldn’t take it anymore, we were far too scarred

We loved each other, but the world had done its harms

And they found us in the river, we had died in each other’s arms


The author's comments:
Now, this one is a little different than otehr things I've written. It's not entirely mine, not entirely original. I had read a story one day on a website and I liked it. I had just written this one day and when I finished, I realized that I had based this on both personal experiences and from the story I read. I believe it's one of my best poems.

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on Apr. 9 2010 at 4:51 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

You're welcome. Keep on writing.

on Apr. 9 2010 at 4:47 pm
JustAnotherShadow503 SILVER, Dallas, Georgia
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Thank you! I appreciate you commenting! I love feedback. It inspires me to write more!

Thanks again,

~Kiera


on Apr. 7 2010 at 5:55 am
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

Wow. Very powerful. It has a lasting effect on me. I like the feeling of suspehse as it builds up. Keep writing.