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A letter to love

April 15, 2009
By Mikal SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
Mikal SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
6 articles 0 photos 41 comments

You told me you need me
That was such a lie
I gave you the best that I could
You swear to be true
Don't make me laugh
You're to greedy just to be with one man
Just give me some space
That's the least you can do
Give me some time to think things through
You swore that you love me
Now is that the truth?
I need to see some proof
Will you even miss me?
I don't think you care
You just like all the things I give you my dear
I think it's time for me to leave
Our show must not go on
Farwell love



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dancestar GOLD said...
on Aug. 23 2011 at 7:10 pm
dancestar GOLD, Westford, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
BE WHO YOU WANNA BE NOT WHO OTHERS WANNA SEE!!!

that was great!! i hope u do become a songwriter...i think there is so much potential for u...u have such a great heart...i didn't kno guyz cld be this expressive...great job!!!

EdytD SILVER said...
on Aug. 25 2009 at 12:58 am
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
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Well, my piece took a lot longer than two weeks.. but it's finally on! take a look (it was written for my teacher, so it's not a poem, but i'd love if you looked at/commented on it! thanks!)

on Jul. 27 2009 at 1:59 am
RachelEliza PLATINUM, Virginia Beach, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
I believe that everything happens for a reason. People change so that you can learn to let go, things go wrong so that you appreciate them when theyre right, and sometimes good things fall apart so that better things can fall together -Marilyn Monroe

i would definately say this is a very realistic piece.

the ending stopped alittle too suddenly, but from reading comments i can tell this is a work in progress. itll be an amzing song someday though, i already have a rhythm for it just by reading...

on Jun. 1 2009 at 2:14 am
soccerpsycho49 PLATINUM, Teaneck, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Those who say that sunshine is happiness have never danced in the rain.

u shud def be a songwriter when u grow up. im also writing a song but as good. luk at my work- Still Holdng

on May. 21 2009 at 2:29 pm
dirtbiker2012 SILVER, Lawson, Missouri
9 articles 0 photos 25 comments
yes i do agree!!!! :D

Jessie4736 said...
on May. 18 2009 at 11:46 pm
craz ygood :] i like ur such a sweet heart to hurt

on May. 18 2009 at 12:03 am
dirtbiker2012 SILVER, Lawson, Missouri
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Thankz for my comment!! Ya I love this poem! I hope you can be a professional song writer wen u get older! Good luck w/ the future!!!!

on May. 17 2009 at 1:11 am
MeghanMichelle GOLD, Hooksett, New Hampshire
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Great song. You have real talent.

EdytD SILVER said...
on May. 15 2009 at 6:30 pm
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 258 comments
Hey! I'd love to somehow hear you sing your music... I'm sure it would sound amazing!

If I were you, I would add some more about what she did that you are writing about - and when you do, add concrete imagery and not so much of the narrator's feelings - if you describe the scene clearly, the reader will feel that he/she is actually in the scene, and will be able to relate. Show, don't tell.



Great! I posted something new also, and i'm just waiting for it to go on (it's been 2 weeks, so that should be any day).

Mikal SILVER said...
on May. 15 2009 at 6:50 am
Mikal SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
6 articles 0 photos 41 comments
Can someome please comment on his in progress song!

Mikal SILVER said...
on May. 6 2009 at 2:53 am
Mikal SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
6 articles 0 photos 41 comments
This is a great song in progress. Don't u agree?