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My Opinion on the Vampires

May 18, 2013
By BeastlySage BRONZE, San Antonio, Texas
BeastlySage BRONZE, San Antonio, Texas
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Some years ago, a "love story" about "vampires" was written by Mormon who had never even seen Dracula or really anything about vampires. The result was popular with many teenage girls and lonely mothers with not much to do. Of course, we all know that it continued into three other "books" to continue this...thing. It choose the name Twilight.

Now, I have never read this, but I know enough about it to consider the series (fan-girls, please do not get upset) complete bilge. I decided to create my own, quite distinct vampires, which come off much less romantic, and vary from sympathetic miserable souls to foul monsters that exist in the depths of your nightmares.

The first variety I came up with were rather simple, but makes itself distinct in the vampire world:

It starts out with a disease. This disease causes you to grow a proboscis, lose hemoglobin in your bloodstream(the stuff which makes your blood red), and have pointed ears. The skin is so vulnerable to heat, it gets first-degree burns in the sunlight, and the light from computer screens is enough to hurt their eyes. Their is hair loss as well. The heart and brain are the only vital organs.

Now, as you noticed, that being sounds is not sexy. The next thing is much worse however. You might think it isn't until I describe it. Here it is:

This type of vampire is a sentient breed of leech which is white. It can become a gas for short periods of time, and uses this ability to hijack into the body of prey. When hijacking, they slowly transform, before bursting out of the body and becoming a being that looks similar to the being they hijacked, but designed to drink blood and kill stuff. When in the body of their prey, they produce spores, which, when they meet another vampires spore, become eggs, which, when they hatch, create a new vampire. They are vulnerable to fire, and are aquatic.

As you noticed, these vampires are basically the facehuggers from alien, but smaller, leech-shaped and with the added bonus of being able to turn into air, and, instead of being on your face and then dying after implanting the embryo into your body, stay in the body, producing spores, slowly transforming into a being that is much more deadly than the original form. So, something close to facehuggers, but not so close it's a copy or rip-off, but close enough to inspire the same feeling of terror.

So, people, which do you prefer: my monstrous creations, or the sparkly superman? And, which are you more afraid of? I think I know how you will answer this. Of course, maybe I'm wrong.

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This article has 6 comments.

KrisNoe GOLD said...
on Jul. 13 2013 at 3:05 pm
KrisNoe GOLD, Mayfield, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
Don't pay no mind to the demons. They fill you with fear.
- Phillip Phillips

ok i agree with u...... as one female who was forced to wach all 5 movies but read by choice all 4 books........ I can honestly say i prefer ur creations..... but to be honest, i thought Twilight(meaning the first book) was a very good book UNTIL the vampire showed the human his sparklyness.... i had hoped the series would get better but sadly they had not I also do not think that you are bashing the series

NEON-BA-BOMB said...
on Jun. 21 2013 at 12:08 pm
I love ur opion on vampires! :)

on Jun. 7 2013 at 5:09 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1159 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

LOL.....while i loved this and enjoyed reading this, i disagree <3 (and btw, if you haven't read something, don't bash it :P nah jk, do whatever ya want) ..... i'd pick the sparkly ones, and i'd still be more afraid of them xD but that's irrelevant. this was still a good piece, 5/5

on Jun. 6 2013 at 6:47 pm
BeastlySage BRONZE, San Antonio, Texas
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That's not really saying much. Twilight vampires are less realistic than dragons, and  about as interesting as an essay on the history of McDonald.

on Jun. 4 2013 at 6:53 pm
LittleLadybird GOLD, Carrickfergus, Other
14 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
To be nobody but yourself in a world that is trying it's hardest every night and day to change you into everyone else is to fight the hardest battle a human being can fight, and never stop fighting.

Hahaha I like your vampires more! :) They are more interesting and realistic, the point of your work is a very good point :)

on May. 23 2013 at 4:32 pm
LiraDaeris PLATINUM, Tucson, Arizona
22 articles 0 photos 135 comments

Favorite Quote:
“You have brains in your head. You have feet in your shoes. You can steer yourself any direction you choose. You're on your own. And you know what you know. And YOU are the one who'll decide where to go...”
― Dr. Seuss, Oh, the Places You'll Go!

Good thoughts intertwined with a twinge of humor. Personally I would be more afraid of the biological vampire- he can kill you, but you can kill the sparkly one with blackmail once you get a picture of him in the sun ;)