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Cloud 9

January 27, 2013
By Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

He said not to stand so close to the edge.
So, I didn't .
I walked in the middle of the road, the world stretching out in front.
But lost in his gaze I don't hear, I don't see, the truck. Barreling down.
It was gaining speed, when he took my hand.
He said we were kings, queens, royalty. I smiled.
He said to stop.
We waited.
The noise grew louder, a strangled cry.
He said he loved me and took my hand.
Then the truck hit.
I swear its bliss.
Like floating on Cloud 9

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on Sep. 14 2013 at 8:36 pm
XCBVIA GOLD, Delaware, Ohio
14 articles 1 photo 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
NGU. Never give up.

Liv, I have seen a lot of your stuff and you are a great writer. I can never do as good as you. I love this poem, but I actually expected the person to get out of the road. But that's you, LOL, you give us the unexpected outcome. Anyways, this is great! So is your other work. :) 5/5 from me.

on Jun. 16 2013 at 4:50 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1136 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

And again, the poem is in the Fiction section....Did you do that intentionally? Or some TeenInk glitch?  By the way, awesome last two lines! So breathtaking... But the ending sure was really unexpected, I mean I just wasn't expecting that hahaha....And well, the theme I didn't get, I mean I suppose I'm probably real stupid not to get it, but truth is I didn't maybe if I read it more time I will, but still maybe you could tell me. Love always.

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 15 2013 at 6:07 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2230 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Great poem, albeit it's in the fiction section. Great title. It totally drew me in. And that ending—wow! Was not expecting it. I felt the emotion and the suspense at the end. Had my attention all the way through. 

dagnytaggart said...
on Apr. 25 2013 at 6:22 pm
This was really good! This poem is so... free, I love how you write without any restraints - it can hold so much meaning to so many people because of that.

on Apr. 4 2013 at 11:57 am
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

thanks! your one of my favorites too!

on Apr. 3 2013 at 7:16 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

Oh. Oh my god! This was absolutely amazing. I can not even put into words how perfect this is. Stunning. This is beautiful and I love this so much. You're such an AMAZING writer. I tried to put this into my favorites but it's saying there's an error right now. This will be in my favorites soon enough. You're great! Xx!

JRaye PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 27 2013 at 10:02 am
JRaye PLATINUM, Dorr, Michigan
43 articles 10 photos 523 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you build your house far enough away from Trouble, then Trouble will never find you."

"Have you ever looked fear in the face and said, 'I just don't care.'?"

Oh my goodness! I love this, so so so good! Keep it up :)

on Feb. 14 2013 at 5:36 pm
Shadowpomgurl PLATINUM, Canton, New York
22 articles 0 photos 126 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I was NEVER that drunk." -Johnny Depp as Jack Sparrow

wow, omg, that was UNEXPECTED!!!! that was a super good piece..was it sposed to be a poem or a short story? either way, beautiful and poignant!