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April 21, 2013
By estucker1998 PLATINUM, Tuscaloosa, Alabama
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estucker1998 PLATINUM, Tuscaloosa, Alabama
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The voracious ambition of humans is never sated by dreams coming true, because of the thought that everything may be done better and again. --John Green, The Fault in Our Stars.

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I'm trying to tell you something important; I'm trying to let you in. But no. You have more important things to do. Your life is more important than mine. You shout and walk out the door. I am left alone, with the statement of my hopes and my dreams still hanging in the air like a broken spider's web trailing in the breeze.

I tried, I really did. But you didn't listen. Can't you see how important this is to me? I've been working practically my whole life on this, but that's not enough is it? Because this is about me, and not about you. And I won’t say a thing, just like always.

Don't worry, you're not the first to turn me down. My smile always fades every time I tell someone. Because they give me this look that says, "I'm supposed to believe you did this? You, a fourteen year-old girl, wrote a book? You, a kid, are going to try and get published?" Every time, I tell myself it is making me stronger. I tell myself this will harden my resolve.

But what if my determination becomes so taught that the next time it's pushed against, it has nowhere to go, so it breaks. It breaks into a million pieces of shattered hopes and broken dreams and abandoned wants. What are you going to do then? Are you going to give me that look again? Are you going to shout? Are you going to walk out the door?

And I am left alone, my hopes and my dreams like a broken spider's web trailing in the breeze.

© Tommy H., San Diego, CA

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I know I've gotten to this point before. But I'll keep trying. I hope you will, too.
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This article has 11 comments.

Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM said...
on May. 23 2013 at 6:18 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
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"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

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Your welcome! Oh and thank you for reading my book! I thought no one would, so thanks! I often put things under the wrong sections also, so don't worry! :) keep rockin Elizabeth
estucker1998 PLATINUM said...
on May. 23 2013 at 4:00 pm
estucker1998 PLATINUM, Tuscaloosa, Alabama
20 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
The voracious ambition of humans is never sated by dreams coming true, because of the thought that everything may be done better and again. --John Green, The Fault in Our Stars.

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Thank you! To tell you the truth, I put in under fiction simply out of habit, I think. I completely forgot it was mostly nonfiction! Ha! I appreciate the encouragment, and I DEFINITELY want to read your story! Thanks!
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM said...
on May. 22 2013 at 9:01 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
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Hi Elizabeth!! Just know your not alone!! I am writing a novel also and also hope to be published!! I really want to make a story that makes people cry. Okay, back to your piece, I agree with Lexus that the title is FABULOUS! Also, I can feel your frustrating and longing. Don't we all feel that when someone turns us down? You are a Really talented writer! Just a question, if this is mostly true why is it in the fiction section? Not that that's a bad thing. Just curious. Amazing job once again. Oh and when you get the book published, can you put your teen ink username in like the back so I can read it be like "wow I 'knew' them!!!!" Haha anyway, great work. Oh, and since you seem like an expert on novel writing, I have a story up called A Tragic Story,if you had time could you look at it?? Anyway that's all. Keep rockin Elizabeth
estucker1998 PLATINUM said...
on May. 6 2013 at 6:41 pm
estucker1998 PLATINUM, Tuscaloosa, Alabama
20 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
The voracious ambition of humans is never sated by dreams coming true, because of the thought that everything may be done better and again. --John Green, The Fault in Our Stars.

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Or google docs.
estucker1998 PLATINUM said...
on May. 6 2013 at 8:19 am
estucker1998 PLATINUM, Tuscaloosa, Alabama
20 articles 0 photos 63 comments

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The voracious ambition of humans is never sated by dreams coming true, because of the thought that everything may be done better and again. --John Green, The Fault in Our Stars.

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Email maybe...?
LexusMarie PLATINUM said...
on May. 6 2013 at 12:07 am
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
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The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

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Okay, what's the best way to do it?
estucker1998 PLATINUM said...
on May. 5 2013 at 10:26 pm
estucker1998 PLATINUM, Tuscaloosa, Alabama
20 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
The voracious ambition of humans is never sated by dreams coming true, because of the thought that everything may be done better and again. --John Green, The Fault in Our Stars.

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I know. Sundays are always my busiest days! And thank you for wanting to help! How would it be best to show it to you? Not sure I want to post it on the internet... 
LexusMarie PLATINUM said...
on May. 5 2013 at 9:44 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
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Hey there, sorry, it's been a very busy day! Omph, Sundays should be relax days! Haha. Yeah, I have heard it's tough, but with the talent that you have always so strongly shown you will get it published. And when it gets published, I'd like your signature on that book to show people when they are like omg I love Elizabeth's books! Yeah, you can show me the first three chapters and I would love to help you.
estucker1998 PLATINUM said...
on May. 5 2013 at 6:09 pm
estucker1998 PLATINUM, Tuscaloosa, Alabama
20 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
The voracious ambition of humans is never sated by dreams coming true, because of the thought that everything may be done better and again. --John Green, The Fault in Our Stars.

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So Lexus, I had a question. Do you think I could send you the first 3 chapters of my book (the first three is right before it really takes off)? I think you have a really good eye for writing and it would be a huge help if you could give me some feedback. I'd love to know what you think. Please reply! 
estucker1998 PLATINUM said...
on May. 5 2013 at 4:57 pm
estucker1998 PLATINUM, Tuscaloosa, Alabama
20 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
The voracious ambition of humans is never sated by dreams coming true, because of the thought that everything may be done better and again. --John Green, The Fault in Our Stars.

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Thank you! Most of that is true (yeah, I'm writing a book, and yeah it's tough) so I really appreciate what you said. I'm working hard on it and once I'm done editing, I'm looking at possible agents. That might be a little ambitious but I believe in my story and that's all I can hope for. If it gets publised I'll send you a copy :)
LexusMarie PLATINUM said...
on May. 5 2013 at 3:59 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
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The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

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Hey Elizabeth! I like the title, I really did not expect this to go the way it did. You put your everything into this I can tell. I see that you truly meant all that you said. You have this under the fiction section, but I feel like this is true? And if it is, just know that you will get what you deserve, okay? And even if it takes longer than you'd like, it will happen. And when it does happen, you can be sure to include that the book was written when you were 14. And you could even put something in there about the trouble you went through getting your book published and how the reader's can do something if they are having troubles. But, those are only IF this is true. If not, I just typed all that for no reason, haha. But, anyways, you wrote this very well. I see how determined this is and how serious you are about you. I loved the tiny bits of repetition in here, they are incorporated very well. Good job! And good luck with getting a book published.