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The Gravedigger

October 4, 2011
By GretaGibson PLATINUM, Vancouver, Other
GretaGibson PLATINUM, Vancouver, Other
23 articles 4 photos 23 comments

I stood in a graveyard with a man looking at a tombstone
"I pity them" he said, and lit a cigarette.
"who the dead?"
"The living"
My smoke fell out of my mouth. "but there's so much to live for"
He shook his head not lifting his gaze "We are trapped by the body. A body confined by hunger, exhaustion, desies, to hot to cold!" he said raising his voice "and our minds" he whispered "and our hearts.
They're so irrational. We over react, we shout, we cry, we go into fits of passion and rage" he sighed "all the lies, all the hate, all the sadness"
He looked at me
"I am the gravedigger. I see things at night that you will never encounter. They speak to me. They do not wish for life. That is why i pity the living. That is why" he looked down again and put out his cigarette "I will join them soon"
Then he turned and walked away



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on Dec. 10 2011 at 2:23 am
DooRonRon SILVER, Barstow, California
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Favorite Quote:
If life hands you lemons, squirt juice in the enemy's eye!
"Dying would be an awful big adventure."- Peter Pan

loved it! i could totally relate to what he was saying! nice way to put things into perspective! and for the people that want it to be longer, sometimes all a write has is just a paragraph, sometimes i write random paragraphs. Sometimes you can't make them longer; no matter how long you try! Just saying:)

mar_mar BRONZE said...
on Nov. 27 2011 at 7:46 pm
mar_mar BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 5 comments
 like it

on Nov. 27 2011 at 7:44 pm
ChocoMint SILVER, Bloomington, Indiana
7 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is like swallowing hot chocolate before it has cooled off. It takes you by surprise at first, but keeps you warm for a long time." - Anonymous

"Love starts with a smile, grows with a kiss and ends with a tear." - Anonymous

Well, I was kinda confused....you might try and make it longer.  <><

on Nov. 27 2011 at 2:48 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1646 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

Okay, I have a bit of criticism.

1.  "who the dead?"  It should be "Who?  The dead?"

2.  "but there's so much to live for"  There should be a period after 'for' and 'But' should be capitalized.

3.  'He shook his head not lifting his gaze.'  There should be a comma after 'head'.

4.  "A body confined by hunger, exhaustion, desire to hot to cold."  You used the wrong 'too'.

5.  A little more description would be nice, just to see more of what's going on.

6.  You might want to work on the mechanics of your dialogue (where to put commas, when to start dialogue, etc).  A quick internet search will help greatly.

Other than that, I like this story!  It definitely has a great concept.


on Oct. 11 2011 at 6:26 pm
woaahItslu BRONZE, Pelham, New Hampshire
1 article 2 photos 1 comment
Very good work(:

on Oct. 10 2011 at 9:01 pm
GretaGibson PLATINUM, Vancouver, Other
23 articles 4 photos 23 comments
-.- the &quot; thing was a technical problem plz ignore